Ohhhhhh fuck. James!
I mean, I know he's an idiot. He took Junior's word when he knew he was a double crossing monster - but jesus, this is brutal. Beautiful in its own black and bitter way, but fuck me - brutal
! I'm just hoping that the fact that James has got so far under his skin might, in some way, be the saving of him... buuut, maybe not.
I do very much like how you have poor old James losing control - it's too easy to underestimate what fear, true fear, will do to a person. But you got that nailed, mate.
Bloody wonderful work! —Mad Andy, for Augustine's Ain't My Bitch
Hol-eee shit. Is all I can say.
OK, no, there's a lot more that I can say. I want to say "Junior, what the fuck?" but that would indicate surprise at his devious, psychopathic ingenuity, and I'm feeling a lot of things, but surprise is not one of them. Junior being one to a thousand steps ahead of ol' James here is a given, at this point. Maybe there will ever be a day where I can comment on a chapter of this story without waxing lyrical about Junior, but today is not that day, because Junior..*sighs admiringly* is now officially my favourite character. I love the development he's undergone here, how he's starting to lose that eternally cool facade. Even though he's still in control of the situation, the cracks are starting to show, and James' shock and fear at this mirrors my own. It only serves to make him more dangerous, and it thrills me to think what else he is capable of doing. It seems he has Lars's psychological profile down to a T, because he's practically mapped out his steps before Lars even took them. It's completely believable that Lars would hop in a cab right back to his captive. Call it Stockhokm syndrome, self-preservation, desperation, the hint of feelings for James (perhaps)...of course Junior would seee it, and James would not. I love his interactions with this Chris person, who comes across as the brainless brawn, whereas Junior is the dominant evil genius! The passages describing the manifestations of madness on Junior's outward appearance are amazing (not just because of the reference to my story title, although...), because I could really visualise it in my head, and my intrigue at such anger and rage barely surpasses the terror I feel for James.
James...James, James. He has been reduced to absolutely nothing here. From the very beginning, the whimpering way he tries to appeal to Junior, or how he wretchedly tries to beg "Dave"...oh man. I would mourn at how far the mighty have fallen, but let's be honest; James has never been the mighty one in this situation. Junior has thought of everything, and the surveillance tapes are proof of that. And the way he found loopholes in James's apparently well-thought-out plan is also. The way James keeps seeing himself in Gar, that ugly recurring premonition is excellent in adding suspense to an already very suspenseful chapter. So, I take it that we will be seeing Lars very soon, huh? I can't wait. I also can't wait to see if Dave indeed never finds out about this. Because if he does, I'd hate to be any of them. But if anyone is gonna survive dave's wrath, my money's on Junior. Always, on Junior. Thank you very much for the dedication *wrigles happily* And thanks for another fantastic chapter! —Slaxl19, for Augustine's Ain't My Bitch
Oh, my word. Why must you hurt my life like this? Why?
Fuck this, who am I kidding. I fucking love angst. And you're giving it to me in bucketloads, making me feel all the feelings, and Ilove you for it.
All right. As ever, I love the way you write Slash's POV. You never let us forget how young he is, how he's..."much too young to let love break his heart," one could say. I loved the passage where he thought about this, thought about how the beer felt in his hands and how he should be living in the moment, being free and happy and careless. "There´s a slight thrill of being separated from them, of not being seen by them." Oh, buddy, I know the feeling. Just another reminder of how separated Slash feels from his surroundings, how alone he is, and it's heartbreaking. I love Izzy's little cameo here, too, the silent observer, always ready to offer a shoulder or a cigarette. The interactions between Slash and Axl are understandably awkward, rife with sexual and emotional tension, charged with electricity. Slash trying to sound cool and casual # but failing is just all of us at some point in our lives, isn't it? "Slash can´t help, but turn to him, his head falling to Axls shoulder, while he repeats it again - “I don´t fuckin´care, you asshole...you fuckin´asshole...” Fuck, man. So much agony here. I wanted to punch Axl when he started comparing Slash to Judy. Then fucking go to Judy, you pathetic ass. Do you really think that's what Slash needs to hear right now? On the other hand, I do feel bad for Axl here. In fact, I feel awful for him. I understand he has feelings for both of them, and I know this is hard on him, but he has Judy. Slash just has bittersweet memories, and pain. Lots of pain. I like how you described the love scene here. Outright smut would have been inappropriate for such an emotional experience. This is not just sex, this is...soemthing more. Something much more, and you conveyed that flawlessly. It's already broken, huh? What a way to end this chapter. Beautiful, devastating line. This update was so worth the wait. —Slaxl19, for Moon's Just One Look.
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