Once again I'm going to agree with Augustine; although I do share some of that personal disgust of second chapters in my /own/ writing, that concept does not apply here as this chapter was great. I thoroughly enjoyed the transitioning from settings. I always love that feeling when stepping off into a foreign country and you captured it to such an extent that at some point while reading this, I thought to myself, "Hey, that reminds me of my first day in Wales." The feeling breaks national borders. :) This is fast becoming one of my favourite stories of here; I can't wait for the next update. —not-enough-duff, for DKD's The Temptation of the Unwanted
Don't forget about Dave and David, I like Jason and James but I'm not really into 'tallica fandom :C unless there's some deth involved. Don't forget about Daves pls, that's what made me fall in love with this fic. Sorry if I'm bitching. —pao_dreamer, for Amerikhastan's What if..
And this is the part where I say that you're completely wrong about the quality of your second chapter. Pointless? Stupid? Ha--this chapter was the polar opposite of both. You establish your setting and develop your characters at a perfect pace. There is not one moment or detail that feels rushed, contrived, or anything but natural or true to life. In (what I presume will be) a supernatural story, I often find that realism makes the creepy parts even creepier. So yes, this is already shaping up to be the most fascinating of tales. Don't be so hard on yourself. Trust your instincts as a writer. The result will be awesome, I have no doubt. P.S.: I knew James would come around to the local cuisine, and not just because of hunger. Those foods sounded delicious. I also loved their exchange at the very end. We know what's really going through Kirk's mind and so does James, it seems. Wonderful job! —Augustine, for DKD's The Temptation of the Unwanted