Quickly go to my bedroom and there he is. He's wearing one of my old rock tshirts that we fixed for him because of his wings, now he doesn't need to stay shirtless. And talking about his gorgeous wings: they are fully stretched, the pearly white feathers almost shine. He can't see me, he's very focused looking out the window, his arms resting on the edge of it, facing the sky. He looked so stunning. I can't believe I have an angel trapped inside this dumpster....
Characters: Dave Mustaine, David Ellefson
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I was on the edge for this chapter. Now you have me craving for more. I do wonder what James is going to say and if he will ever find out what Dave did to Junior. I do enjoy Fran and I second Acillatem's review for the most part. I do think Dave's lying about a lot of stuff. Either that or James didn't say anything to betray Junior [I don't think that] but of course Dave will twist everything around. I can't wait to see more and great chapter. Keep reading and writing! —blacksapphire, for Augustine's All Within My Hands
You. Had. Me. Hanging. On. Every. Word! Best chapter yet! Perfectly set up and well executed. Dave is such a creep! I totally get him. He's a whole mix of intentions, motivations, lies and voices. A very fascinating villain. And nice job making phones a motif. I only recognized it in this chapter, but that's neat. This, right here, is awesome:
I recognize the area code but not the number itself. 415. That's San Rafael. Aside from the Hetfields and Kirk, nobody but the production company I'm about to interview for knows that I'm even in town. I can only assume that they're calling to reschedule. That's okay. I don't have any other plans today. If they want me to come in earlier and Fran isn't ready, I'll just call myself a cab after all.
I clear my throat and square my shoulders before I answer. I want to sound as professional as I can.
"This is David Ellefson."
A cold breath of laughter crackles through the speaker.
"Well, hello there...Junior."
And, OMG! David James isn't like that! No! Stay! Not gonna lie, last chapter was a bit quiet, but this was intense and great. Oh, and there's too much going on to notice it, but I think you captured how David's inner monologue would sound. :)That's a PS. And of course I can't wait for an update :) but take what time you need. Blagh . . . so awesome. :) —Acillatem, for Augustine's All Within My Hands
Omg another cliffhanger. I have no words to describe how emotional is this chapter. My heart beat so fast while reading, your descriptions are perfect That I can feel every emotion. Poor David, he was starting to heal and Dave ruined everything. Please be good with us and give us another chapter soon. This story is like a drug, I swear. This is so well written in every chapter, that would be the best work in this site. Congrats and thanks for the update. Sorry for misspelled words I can barely write I'm english. —pao_dreamer, for Augustine's All Within My Hands